I suggest that you be more descriptive when you write. Avoid analysing the image while you are image streamning. If thoughts take over, you're not describing images. Descrive in detail.
Your example lacks detail in description.
Even if you cannot use a tape still record your images stream out loud. Enlist the help of a friend to write down your image stream while talking out loud or have them help you with the tape. I never bother to listen to the tape since I write it down immediately after image streaming I find I remember it detailed enough..
Debriefing is important so if you type your image stream you are going to have to debreif by drawing or talking out loud about the image steam
Asking a question and expecting an answer almost never works that's why it's recommended that you use over the wall or Hight Think Tank for answering questions.
Also when asking questions don't limit it to one image stream. Remember to do the second streams for clarifying the answer.
Alex
