You’ve made a great start!
That being said, I wonder if you could make them more personal, because what you’ve written could be applied to most people.
Jack Canfield often says that “It’s not the stuff that we want. It’s the way it would make us feel.” Tune into how it would feel to achieve each of your goals, and build some of the adjectives that come up into your goals statements.
When you do this, your goals become more dynamic and personal and you are more connected to them. It also activates two universal laws “Like attracts like” and “You get more of what you focus on.”
What you want to end up with is something that is exciting when you read it to yourself. It has that “zing” that makes your heart dance and/or your soul sing. Then ask yourself who you would need to be to make that outcome inevitable.
All the best to you on your journey!